Additional+Thoughts


 * One area I would first look is what are her ideal writing conditions?
 * She said she liked free writing, the idea of being in the "flow", being creative.
 * She liked exaggerating facts, I would explore this to fully understand but she could be talking about persuasive writing.
 * Another area would be teaching the process of drafting.
 * She said that she felt she lost her spunk. I believe she is talking about formal writing and how she feels her voice is lost. You could teach her about the drafting process and how your creative voice is something that is developed through revision. For example, in the second sentence she talks about using "big words". This would be an easy fix on the second draft. Expansion is easier to identify when you step back from the paper and review it. This would be something she could identify in her own paper.
 * The weakest aspect of the paper is the depth. But if she has a good foundation for the start of a larger more in-depth paper.
 * Technology would benefit the student in many different aspects.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 12pt; line-height: normal; margin-bottom: 10pt; margin-left: 0in; margin-right: 0in; margin-top: 0in;">Editing would be a lot easier. She scribbled out mistakes. Because the sample was hand written with pen her mistakes were more visible. Technology allows us to simply add to our drafts instead of rewriting.
 * <span style="margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0.5em; padding-bottom: 0px; padding-left: 3em; padding-right: 0px; padding-top: 0px;"><span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 12pt; line-height: normal; margin-bottom: 10pt; margin-left: 0in; margin-right: 0in; margin-top: 0in;">The student spelled "a lot" incorrectly, with editing software this would likely have been edited automatically.
 * <span style="margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0.5em; padding-bottom: 0px; padding-left: 3em; padding-right: 0px; padding-top: 0px;"><span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 12pt; line-height: normal; margin-bottom: 10pt; margin-left: 0in; margin-right: 0in; margin-top: 0in;">I would say the computer would simplify the process for her. I think it would also become a tool for her other writing. You could encourage making digital copies of her past work. Then you could encourage her to edit.